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Postby kaze » Thu Dec 18, 2003 2:53 pm

It's getting so exciting!! I can't wait to read more -^^-
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Postby Razgriz » Thu Dec 18, 2003 3:09 pm

arigatou gozaimasu! : D
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Postby Razgriz » Sat Dec 20, 2003 7:25 pm

*****

The katana flew from the sheath like a cool winter breeze, its chilling edge glided through the air toward Velmach.

*Bringgggg!!!*

Zeriel’s iaijutsu strike was stopped cold by another katana. Standing before him was Deluris, in his red/black Kelvar combat suit, his purple eyes deep with anger, and his blonde hair like an eternal flame. Deluris smirked.

Zeriel: [I]“Kore ga…masaka!!!â€
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Postby Razgriz » Sat Dec 20, 2003 7:30 pm

*****

Victoria suddenly sat up, the paramedics startled by her sudden move. As she looked around, the park appeared be under lockdown by the FPA. Ground APCs and AAPCs have landed through out the park, FPA officers in full combat gear patrolled the area, and a large group of specialized officers using SCUBA gear were jumping into a hole on the iced up surface of the river.

Victoria looked around.

Capt. Degretti: “Where is he?!â€
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Postby Razgriz » Sat Dec 20, 2003 7:32 pm

“one of child-like faithâ€
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Postby Icarus » Sat Dec 20, 2003 10:50 pm

Cool. :rock: ;)
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sat Dec 20, 2003 11:02 pm

Hummmm, I like your story.~-^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby kaze » Sat Dec 20, 2003 11:47 pm

I see you've used "masaka" lol ^^ It's getting more and more interesting... :D
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Postby Mimichan » Sun Dec 21, 2003 12:09 am

*hugs*....the story just gets more and more exciting AND interesting. very good ^_^
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby Razgriz » Sun Dec 21, 2003 11:27 am

Thank you all very much! : D

lol, kaze, I hope to use more Japanese in the future : D
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Postby Icarus » Sun Dec 21, 2003 2:45 pm

One slight thing. If you do, could you include the translation? Or use it in a context such that its meaning is unmistakeable? Thanks.
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Postby Danyasaur » Sun Dec 21, 2003 2:58 pm

ooooo I like the girl! ^_^ *sits and sips tea waiting for Saney to come back* ^_^
[color="DimGray"]I don't believe that I would die if I saw you face to face;
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Postby Razgriz » Sun Dec 21, 2003 3:16 pm

lol, thanks, and yep, I will include a translation along with the original text..."subtitles" if you will.
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Postby Lochaber Axe » Mon Dec 22, 2003 1:57 pm

Your story is coming along nicely Sangoku. I also started up my Meledriel story again if you would like to know. Next part is the big battle. :thumb:
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Postby Razgriz » Tue Dec 23, 2003 3:59 pm

~Scene 3: A Simple Child~

Zeriel opened the door to his apartment and marched in, followed by Celeste. Inside, a main living room had most of its space been taken up by a desk with a computer, and some martial arts training equipment. To the side, was an open air kitchen that looked rarely used, and three doors with the words “armory, library, and bedroomâ€
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Postby Razgriz » Tue Dec 23, 2003 4:01 pm

*****

Zeriel: "….an assassin of an evil organization called the Hydra Syndicate. My friend and I waged a cold war on behalf of the Syndicate against the Hong Kong Triad. We were their super soldiers. In the end…the Triad was destroyed, and the Syndicate won. After the war, I left, and begun a crusade to destroy the Syndicate to this very day."

Celeste: "Woah…I’m sure your parents wouldn’t be too happy about you being in the Syndicate."

Zeriel: "I never knew who my dad was…but my mom, she was in the syndicate…"

*****

A woman in a white dress sat in a rocking chair, with the Holy Bible sitting in her lap. On the ground before her, was a boy not older than eight, with short silver hair.

Woman: "And so…God so loved the world that he gave his one and only Son, that whoever believes in him shall not perish but have eternal life."

Zeriel: "So…Jesus died on the cross, for us."

Woman: "Exactly!"

The woman smiled. Suddenly, the door chime rang, and the woman jumped up from her chair, while Zeriel climbed to his feet.

Woman: "I’m sorry Zeriel, we’ll continue this next time."

Zeriel: "Ok mom."

The Woman went into her room and hid the Bible under the mattress before going over to the door and opening it. Quinton Velmach stepped into the room, accompanied by four Syndicate soldiers, all wearing urban camo with full combat gear and sporting FN-FNC assault rifles.

Woman: "Mr. Velmach, please to see you."

Velmach: "Thank you Alexandra, we’ve come to take your boy to training."

Alexandra: "Very well."

Alexandra knelt down and hugged Zeriel. Zeriel hugged back before going to Velmach.

Alexandra: "I better not find any bruises or cuts on my son like last time."

Velmach: "Hmph."

Alexandra looked on as Velmach led Zeriel out; Zeriel turned around and saw sadness appearing on his mother’s face.


*****

Zeriel: "…she took care of me, and taught me the Word of God. And I accepted the Christ, and He helped me through those tough times."

Celeste smiled.

Celeste: "So where’s your mom now?"

Zeriel: "She…"

*****

A teenage Zeriel stood in the room, wearing his Kevlar suit. His eyes widened with shock, his face covered with blood.

A woman’s body flopped to the floor like a rag doll, a pool of blood began to emerge from beneath her.

Quinton Velmach looked on with a smirk.

A dark-hooded cloaked man turned around and walked away with his bloody katana, followed by Velmach.

Zeriel’s world suddenly turned black and white.


*****

Zeriel: "…died"

Celeste: "I’m sorry…"

Celeste frowned.

Zeriel: "….after that…I left…"

*****

On top of a catwalk in a massive hanger, two dark-hooded cloaked figures clashed with swords. One had silver hair, the other, black. Both men carried katanas as their weapon of choice, both men were breathing hard from fatigue.

Zeriel: "Zenkormat! I’m going to make you pay for what you’ve done to my mother!"

Zenkormat: "Foolish boy! Your mother went against the Hydra Syndicate and my corporation! She was a traitor!"

Zeriel: "She was my mother!"

Zeriel rushed forward and clashed swords with Zenkormat, the two men engaged in a sword lock. However, Zenkormat was incredibly strong, and Zeriel felt that he was about to be pushed down on the ground. Then unexpectedly, Zeriel managed to summon the strength to push Zenkormat back and off of the side of the catwalk.


*****

Zeriel: "I defeated the leader of the Hydra Syndicate, hoping that would end everything, but I was wrong. The second in command of the Syndicate, Quinton Velmach, escaped and started the Syntech Foundation, which continued the ideals of the Hydra Syndicate. Also, the Syndicate’s head researcher, Sebastian Dracus, led a secret research campaign that would give birth to a new breed of super soldier…like myself, but his plans were stopped by the FPA recently before it could be brought to fruition."

Celeste: "So who do you fight now?"

Zeriel: "Now, I fight the Syntech Foundation, to end the legacy of the Hydra Syndicate for good."

Celeste: "I can see why you wouldn’t want to trust just people, you’ve been through a lot."

Zeriel: "You have no idea. When you put trust in people, they’ll betray you when they don’t need you anymore."

Celeste: "That’s not true."

Zeriel: Not true? I’ve been betrayed not by just a friend, but by someone who I’ve known for practically all of my life, a person whom I share the same blood with!

*****

[I]It was a cold spring night…the rain was pouring down in great torrents, blurring out the neon lights of Hong Kong in the skyline behind a dark hooded cloaked man with shoulder length blonde hair.

A silver-haired man in a jet black Kevlar combat suit knelt on the ground, wounded.

Blonde-haired man:“…Know that after this day…if I ever meet you again, I will be your enemy…â€
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Postby Razgriz » Tue Dec 23, 2003 4:03 pm

*****


Zeriel: "If I am betrayed by such an individual that I’ve known for my entire life…then putting trust in someone I’ve known for less would be compromising to say the least. I’ve never forgiven this person, and I don’t think I ever will."

Celeste: "Oh…I’m sure that you could…"

Zeriel: "Why do you think that?"

Celeste: "I feel that you really want to forgive this person."

Zeriel: "You don’t understand, I could never…"

Celeste: "It’s destroying you…"

Zeriel:"…..finish eating, I’ll go and prepare the library for you to stay in during the night."

Celeste nodded as Zeriel went to the library. Celeste knew fully well that Zeriel’s lack of forgiveness is destroying him, for she too, was being destroyed by the same troubles. After a few minutes, Zeriel emerged from the library.

Zeriel: "I have work to do, but you should get to sleep, it’s almost 4 a.m."

Celeste nodded and took her stuffed monkey along with her into the library.

Celeste: "Good night."

Zeriel nodded response.

Celeste shut the door behind her and saw a futon laid out before her. In the room, bookshelves lined the wall from top to bottom, all of them filled with books of all kinds. Celeste reached over to the light switch and turned it off, and then she walked over to the futon and lied down with her stuffed monkey.

Celeste: "Miss. Monkey, before we go to sleep tonight, lets say a prayer for Zeriel, ok?"

*****

Victoria sat in the empty FPA office with her feet propped up on her desk. She was back in her uniform now, and to her, it was by far a lot more comfortable than that dress, for which she blamed for the failed operation. In her hands, was the katana that she wrestled from Zeriel in their skirmish just a few hours ago. The blade was expertly crafted, with perfect balance and weight. The nano trigger in the hilt activated a super fine monomolecular edge that could slice through steel with great ease. She unlocked the hilt and a signature was present. It said in Kanji, “the dragon slayer blade-Masamuneâ€
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Postby Icarus » Tue Dec 23, 2003 4:35 pm

Keep writing, and I'll keep reading.
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Postby kaze » Tue Dec 23, 2003 5:37 pm

this is getting really good!! i like the stories from the character's pasts that you wove in...it really explains more about them and adds a lot to the intensity and everything...it's so cool, i cant wait for the next part ^_^
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Postby Razgriz » Tue Dec 23, 2003 5:40 pm

Domo arigatou : D, I'm glad you all like it, Kaze, I'll post the next installment soon, and Icarus, I will continue to write for a little while longer...
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Postby Razgriz » Fri Dec 26, 2003 9:29 pm

*****

Velmach: “Do you understand?â€
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Postby Razgriz » Fri Dec 26, 2003 9:29 pm

Invictus backed off, fear washing over him.

Invictus: “Maximum Aeon Potential?!â€
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Postby Razgriz » Fri Dec 26, 2003 9:30 pm

“the iron dragonâ€
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Postby Icarus » Sat Dec 27, 2003 8:51 pm

:dance: good update.
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Postby kaze » Sun Dec 28, 2003 11:41 pm

Wow that's so cool, he can fly now! :D I'm glad that the monkey was saved <^_^>

here's the link to the pic of Zeriel :
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Postby Razgriz » Mon Dec 29, 2003 9:48 am

Thank you both! : D...I like the monkey too : D, and your art of Zeriel is awesome!
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Postby kaze » Mon Dec 29, 2003 12:42 pm

lol arigatou
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Postby Mimichan » Tue Dec 30, 2003 1:54 am

Sorry I haven't posted anything in a while, but I've been absent the past couple of days ^_^. Your story is coming along very nicely. I think that you have incredible talent and I love the descriptive detail that you go into (especially in the action/fight sequences). but I also love that it's not just about the nanomodules and electro-katanas^_~--but you have also given a Place to the Gospel and to the Lord in it. very cool .
Oh, and about the conversation we had a few days ago...You'd mentioned Miss Monkey (that you put her in the story) I didn't understand then cause I hadn't gotten that far...Now I get it ^_^ I think it's cute and I am sure the real Miss Monkey approves as well ^_~.
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What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby Solid Ronin » Fri Jan 02, 2004 10:41 am

Curse you, you talented man curse and Bless you
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