Felix's Writing

[Felix]

Ok. Due to some edging on by some friends I decided to make a thread to put the little odds and ends I write into.
SO anyway..I'll start out with some of the things I've already written, then continue to update as I am inspired ^-^ Enjoy:

Ok so here's a cryptic random little poem I decided to write. It really has no point, so don't look for one ^^

Frozen in silence,
Shadowed by fear,
Not really there,
And not really here,
Drifting past sunset,
A life called profound,
Not really lost,
But not really found,
A blink in the window,
A glance at the stars,
Not really near,
And not really far,
Encompassed by twilight,
A flickering frown,
Not really up,
But not really down,
Abandoned this song,
Cast down by the sun,
Not really finished,
Not nearly begun.

[christianfriend]

^___^ I realy like this one! VERY good job Danny!

[Ssjjvash]

That
is
cool!

[Felix]

Thanks guys ^^ I might as well post some of my older ones too:

This is a little poem I made for my "sister". To clarify, Aneichan sorta means big sister in japanese (I know it's probably not a pure translation, but that's just what I always called her, so it stuck)

The One
The one I've never seen or felt,
The one I can't hold near,
The one who came and touched my heart,
The one who wiped my tears,
The one who's there, yet also here,
The one who dried up all my fear,
The one I love with all my soul,
The one to whom I give my whole,
The one who cheers me when I'm sad,
The one who calms me when I'm mad,
The one who never tallies score,
The one who never asks for more,
The one who loves me as I am,
The one I call Aneichan.

[Felix]

One of my first poems.

Sorrow’s Song
Dim faces fly by,
Bringing bitter regret,
Full of lost hopes,
That I’d rather forget,

How could this be?
That I’m feeling so down,
When near and where distant,
Love floats all around,

I try and reach out,
To hold it, embrace it,
But all my touch does,
Is mar it, deface it,

My heart is so barren:
A well long dried up,
My soul screams for comfort:
A lost frightened pup,

There’s a thick sheet of ice,
Blocking me from the world,
Causing perception,
To crumble and swirl,

I yearn for the clarity,
Of what’s hidden deep,
The secrets lie waiting,
Alone and asleep,

My sorrow sings sweetly,
Pushed on by my pain,
My wounds they bleed freely,
Like soft crimson rain,

I’m past comprehension,
I wander alone,
With nothing to cherish,
No place to call home,

I’m sure there’s still something,
As hopeless this seems,
A place to find safety,
To unfurl my wings,

The sorrow will drain out,
Replaced soon by peace,
It’s patience I need now,
To reach sweet relief...

[christianfriend]

I LOVE this poem! Its so nicely done..keep em' coming my friend!

[Felix]

Hmm...I'm running out. Must write more! Well I have one, but I don't know if I'm permited to put it up

[Photosoph]

Those are all really good Felix -you've managed to rhyme them really well (personally I love rhyme), without losing the rhythmn or changing the sentences around so much that they're unrecognisable. That is a big achievement; generally any poems I write start out with one rhythmn and end up with another!
Also I loved the crypticness of your first poem, as well as its quick temp and descriptions. Your imagery is really great. Excellent writing!
(Dang! I had to use both rhyme and rhythmn more than three times in the same post! Please tell me I spelt them right! XD )

[Felix]

XD well thanks! I'm glad you read my stuff and like it! It means a lot! I try to write more.

[Ssjjvash]

Very good! I like 'em a lot.

Do you mind me asking who Aneichan is? Is that your sister? I'm just curious.

[Felix]

Lol. Well Aneichan "roughly" means Big Sister in Japanese. That's just what I call her anyway.

[Felix]

Ok just another weird little poem I scribbled down. Not sure if it's finished, but it probably is. Still kinda in progress but here's what I've got so far:

Falling upwards, flooding fast,
Sifting through the sands of past,
Sailing on without a mast,
Tossing chance to be the last.
Passion plummets, fires flicker,
Life read off a bumper sticker,
Sink a knife and end it quicker,
Mankind's bicker just got sicker.
Fowl fragrance rank with llust,
Sickened minds, distorted trust,
Blind perversion clogged with rust,
Soon shall flesh return to dust.
Fogged perception, through the haze,
Sinking slowly to the grave,
Walk upon the end of days,
Who amongst us can be saved?

[Photosoph]

Again, I really like your rhythm, rhymes, and descriptions. Excellent writing!

[Felix]

Thanks, Soph!

[christianfriend]

Oh wow! I realy like this one. its beautifly done!

[Felix]

Thanks buddy! ^^

[Photosoph]

No problem, Felix! I'm enjoying your poems. ^_^

[Ssjjvash]

Ooh, that one was great! I love your style!

[Felix]

Once again, thank you! ^^ You guys are too kind.

[Rachel]

Hey, I really like your poems. They're great.

[Felix]

Ahh...heh..I really don't know..there's so many different dialects that it's hard to determine one word...that's just what I called her at first and it stuck...so even if it doesn't mean sister it's still my name for her. ^__^

XD well I'm glad you likey teh skills.

[Felix]

Ok so yeah...like all my poems..the little thingy in my sig popped into my head so I scribbled it down. Not much, but enjoy. It's a bit of a different style from the other things I've written..I think. *shrug* The tempo doesn't really fit too good but I like it anyway.

[Felix]

Ok I have a bit of updated stuff. Just some small things.


The one I just removed from my sig:

A blanket of saddened song,
Is all you're choking on,
Time moves on,
And you're still left behind,
The story of your life,
Got stuck in rewind,
You're the last man picked,
On the second-chance team,
You feel like a salmon
That's stuck downstream,
Heart filled with doubt,
You feel cast out,
From the flock, like the odd seagull,
In a spiritual drought,
With no way out,
Fake life won't fill a God-shaped hole.


Two little poems that sprang to mind:

A thread alone might snap at best,
But many twined will hold the stress.
A soul alone might make a ripple,
But many joined will cause a flood.
A heart alone might crack and fade,
But many saved will always last.
A life alone might trip and fall,
But under God, it's life at least.

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Drifting through the drafty sky,
Need to get back down to earth
One more chance, one last try,
To show them what I'm worth,
Tell me a reason, show me a way,
Give me the nighttime, or give me the day,
Shadow so low, perspective so high,
I let go my wings and I tell them to fly,
Maybe tomorrow I'll stop and think twice,
Less skating on water, more swimming on ice,
But time is still open, one ticket for show,
I'm hanging on sunset, and not letting go.

[Ssjjvash]

The one from your sig....I love it!

<<Fake life won't fill a God-shaped hole.>>
This is so true!

[Photosoph]

Strange, I remember reading this quite a while ago, but maybe I forgot to reply. ^_^"

I like that one from your sig, Felix. ^_^ It's powerful, though a little sad, and again I like your rhthym, descriptions and rhyme. The things you mention are so cool -liket he 'odd seagull', and 'samon downstream'. Hmm... being an animal-lover, I think those ones stuck in my mind the most.

The other two poems rock too, but I really like that second one. Such really cool phrases; I especially liked the last four lines: "I let go my wings and I tell them to fly, Maybe tomorrow I'll stop and think twice, Less skating on water, more swimming on ice, But time is still open, one ticket for show, I'm hanging on sunset, and not letting go."
Less skating on water, more swimming on ice... so cool! And I know I've used that word so many times during this post, but that's because they really are. I could, of course, have used 'superb', 'excellent', and 'skillful', but I just used cool. I meant the same thing, though. ^_^

[Felix]

^_^ Thanks so much for your feedback and kind words guys!

I'm glad you liked my choices of words, Soph. And animals certainly do rock!
I hope you guys like reading these as much as I enjoy writing them! Because I do know that they are "So Cool"
Thanks a billion for always reading my stuff and leaving great feedback, Soph, and thank you too, Vash, for reading and enjoying my writings. ^__^

[Felix]

Yay for yet another poem!


"One by one, they come they come,

They crash, they burn, they fall,

Thrum by thrum, they strum they strum,

Until the music stalls.

Up and down, this life goes round,

The notes fall limp as dolls,

The deadened sound, of hope been drowned,

Melodic requiem calls,

Fight for life, amid the strife,

Remembrance hits the walls,

Live to breathe, die with Me,

And walk upon these halls..."

[Photosoph]

Yes -yay for yet another poem! Don't forget the exclamation mark.

Woah... the beat and rhyme in this one is REALLY good. Your other ones have been excellent too... but somehow the beat and rhyme in this one is really... 'powerful' seems to be the only word I can think of to describe it at the moment. I love the words you use, too: melodic requiem, notes fall limp as dolls... they're really cool. Not to mention the way you bring through a great message in your poems.

[Felix]

Oh! Of course! "!"* There..all fixed. ^^

Ah thanks so much! Yet again the words and rhymes and rythms just flow from my hand as I write without a clue what I'm writing until I stand back and look it over. But thanks so much, it means a lot to hear your kind feedback!

[Photosoph]

No problem -I'm surprised you don't spend more time over them! They read as if you did... or in other words, they're really good and so I would've thought you did spend more time.