The feelings or grief still gasp me,
surrounding and pressing my frame
like long, tenacious fingers...
that I cannot see, but feel...
To think it has been this long already...
two whole years have passed
since my world came crashing down...
that my hopes vanished...
my faith shaken from its foundation...
my spirit crushed...
my heart broken.
No longer can I come to you in
sadness and confusion...
no longer can your arms...
keep me safe and warm.
I fall to my knees to the ground...
the grass still unevened...
The spot still visible.
To think....it has been so long.
To think you have missed my life change...
changes you had dreamed of seeing.
Tears-hot and heavy
gush from my eyes,
showering your grave marker.
My dear one....
my precious idol of hope and inspiration...
To think it has been so long...
I can still recall
picking buttercups...
baking peanut butter cookies...
long afternoons in the kitchen...
talking, laughing, playing...
Sweet years of childhood dashed
by the Tomb of Death and Reality...
No longer do I live in Fantasy....
I know and see the World now....
and to think it has been two years...
two years since the day you left.
I love you, Nanny, I can't wait to meet up with you again in Heaven.
RPA 11-21-13 to 3-18-05.
Rememberance....a poem
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Rememberance....a poem
Jeremiah 29:11-"For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord,"plans to prosper you and not to harm you, plans to give you hope and a future."
"All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players; they have their entrances and their exits and one man in his time plays many parts."-Will Shakespeare
@)}~ carry this rose in your sig, as thanks, to all the CAA Moderators
"All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players; they have their entrances and their exits and one man in his time plays many parts."-Will Shakespeare
@)}~ carry this rose in your sig, as thanks, to all the CAA Moderators
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Phantom_Sorano - Posts: 909
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Very beautiful, and sad.
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[color="Red"]Distance is to Love as Wind is to Fire...it extinguishes the small, and ignites the great. - Unknown[/color]
[color="RoyalBlue"]“Falling in love with someone isn't always going to be easy... Anger... tears... laughter.. It's when you want to be together despite it all. That's when you truly love another. I'm sure of it.â€
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[color="Red"]Distance is to Love as Wind is to Fire...it extinguishes the small, and ignites the great. - Unknown[/color]
[color="RoyalBlue"]“Falling in love with someone isn't always going to be easy... Anger... tears... laughter.. It's when you want to be together despite it all. That's when you truly love another. I'm sure of it.â€
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Destroyer2000 - Posts: 1756
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"The feelings or grief still gasp me,"
Do you mean "feelings of grief"?
"my faith shaken from its foundation..."
Unusual and interesting phrasing. It is pleasing to me.
"I fall to my knees to the ground..."
I like your prepositional sequence here.
"The spot still visible."
What spot? The indentions of your knees (which are still in a kneeling posture)?
"Tears-hot and heavy"
I would recommend putting another dash after "heavy" to give the phrase more closure.
"showering your grave marker."
It all makes sense now. Disregard the spot question. Good.
What a nice tribute to your loved one.
Do you mean "feelings of grief"?
"my faith shaken from its foundation..."
Unusual and interesting phrasing. It is pleasing to me.
"I fall to my knees to the ground..."
I like your prepositional sequence here.
"The spot still visible."
What spot? The indentions of your knees (which are still in a kneeling posture)?
"Tears-hot and heavy"
I would recommend putting another dash after "heavy" to give the phrase more closure.
"showering your grave marker."
It all makes sense now. Disregard the spot question. Good.
What a nice tribute to your loved one.
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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Well, thank you. I especially appreiate your line analysis, Anna Mae. I wrote this when I was upset, so I am not surprised I misspelled words. Thanks for pointing it out.
Jeremiah 29:11-"For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord,"plans to prosper you and not to harm you, plans to give you hope and a future."
"All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players; they have their entrances and their exits and one man in his time plays many parts."-Will Shakespeare
@)}~ carry this rose in your sig, as thanks, to all the CAA Moderators
"All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players; they have their entrances and their exits and one man in his time plays many parts."-Will Shakespeare
@)}~ carry this rose in your sig, as thanks, to all the CAA Moderators
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Phantom_Sorano - Posts: 909
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wow O_O phantom thats beautifully well written on my veiw point
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[color=cyan]†[size=84]smile Jesus loves you[/SIZE][/color]
procastinators unite.......................tommorrow
[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]
[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt
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[color=cyan]†[size=84]smile Jesus loves you[/SIZE][/color]
procastinators unite.......................tommorrow
[color=palegreen]So in times when all your hope is gone
And you go through life afraid
In your heart there lies a hopeful song
That is there to guide the way
And all the hurt and all the pain
You soon will learn was not in vain
For all your prayers, they will be heard
They'll come to pass through faith [/color]
[color=palegreen]~When you Believe from Prince of Egypt
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